Friday, September 25, 2009

Goop

Beneath a forboding bridge lies the silent killer, also known as the Goop. Angered, the green beast slips along the ground, smoothly, quietly, like a cobra. It spots its target, the man, and delves into the ground, silent, deadly, preparing to strike. The creeping Goop senses a halt in the mans movement. The creature violently pushes upward, and surfaced. Undetected, it attacks. He is engulfed by the monster, and the Goop sadistically suffocates the unsuspecting man.

3 comments:

  1. ooh thats very good. i dont know exactly what the goop it, but you describe it all so well. very good. the mood is kinda creppy

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  2. Wow. I feel kind of in danger just READING that. It reminded me of the octopus.

    You utilized the multiple-adjectives things very professionally. That was something I blatantly ignored, and it kind of detracted from my own work, but you did a great job.

    In shorthand: I like it. Good job.

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  3. That was very descriptive. There were really good word choices used that helped to picture what the goop is.

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